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I'm Still Here

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I'm the pebble at the bottom of his foot
That tags along through the mud and the dirt
But that pain he feels is the remembrance
That I'm still here
I am unappreciated.
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ALBDreamweaver's avatar
I like, though i'm unfamiliar with the form. It's obviously trying to conform to some form, and it's tagged as eastern/haiku, which in 99% of cases on this site makes it haiku, except this isn't. What is it? I'd like to use it, since the three line limit really keeps me and haiku from seeing eye to eye.

The imagery was excellent here, good job overall.